Amina

Week 6(21)


I was going through my attic, I found a old doll that looked haunted and a cool looking lamp. All of a sudden I see something shining in a big cardboard box, My brother was calling me to come downstairs but I had to see what was inside.


I ran over to the corner and dragged the box to a brighter space, I lifted the flaps of the box to reveal a lottery ticket.
I go downstairs, scratch it then look for my mom because I don’t know how to read a lottery ticket, and we got 100,000 dollars.

Week 4(21)

I was walking home from school, my legs were all bruised and in pain because I had fallen into a ditch with my violin in hand. I hadI landed right in a prickly green cactus!

“OUCH” I yelled, I slowly climbed out of the ditch and walked back home planning out how I was going to tell my parents about what had happened. I got to my front door and sat there picking out each and every cactus spine individually before I rang the doorbell. Mom opened door like she already knew what happened



“Come, let’s get you cleaned up.”

Practice Week

 I don’t know how but I ended up in the back of someone's bike in a basket with some sour apples,and my other pumpkin friend started yelling out of nowhere, we were tipping over. The boy riding his bike flew into a hay bale head first like a speeding bird, then our basket started to fall off the bike in slow motion, we hit the ground then...BOOM, the bike hit the ground. And me, I landed in a mud puddle, I have never been so disgusted ever to be in the mud since I was a seedling.


6 comments:

  1. I like how you made it feel realistic.
    ~Cara C.

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  2. i love how you said the basket tipped in slow motion part so funny tolol lily.hubbard

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  3. I love love your story very funny it´s a great story and also i really liked that you jumped right in and that you made the point of view a pumpkin! it´s a great story!! -Alba Hila

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  4. I love love your story very funny it´s a great story and also i really liked that you jumped right in and that you made the point of view a pumpkin! it´s a great story!! -Alba Hila

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  5. I liked the beging case you jumped right into the story.

    Soleil Dupuis

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  6. Hi Amina
    Your story literally made me say a loud OUCH! You described everything so well that I almost felt it was happening to me. I play the violin so was on the edge of my seat when I read that you had fallen into a ditch with your violin in your hand. Hopefully it was in its case and that substantial damage wasn't done to it. I then read what I presume was your first 100 word challenge ie Practice Week and wow that was a very creative response to the prompt especially as you told the story from the perspective of one of the fruit and vegetables in the basket. I loved your last line about being so disgusted at being in the mud and linking it to when you were a seedling. I hope you keep writing for the 100 word challenge and I'm looking forward to reading some more of your work in the near future. Well done.
    Máire O'Keeffe (Team 100wc)
    Galway, Ireland

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